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Old 03-15-2008, 09:13 AM   #5 (permalink)
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I guess I should explain myself more clearly.

When you mentioned "Pacific Ocean to the Atlantic Ocean," you should have just written "Pacific to the Atlantic," to be less repetitive. The reader is going to know that you are obviously talking about oceans. And you really stressed that you were the only one who had your "key." That's pretty much all you've said. I like the concept, but please, try to stand out a little more. Write about something else, like what makes your dreams special or how you realized you found the key.
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