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Well, untill I'm positive about what happens next I don't want to do anything because I might make a fool of myself if I mess up. My goals for this story is to have an administrator or popular moderator read this story and give it a good rating.
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(Pit) "Well, lets go find the others. They might need our help, and we need their help."
(Mario) "M'kay." (Pit) "You sound just like my goddess." (Mario) "What?" (Pit) "I said, lets go!" *All of the sudden they see the Halberd in the distance, then, in a flash they saw another ship chase after it. * * * (Kirby) "Oh, snap!" (Zelda) "Go faster!" *The Halberd hits them* (Kirby) "Oh, snap!" (Zelda) "Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!" * * * *The new ship was flying around the Halberd being shot at by the cannons. Suddenly, a mechanic arm shot out from the Halberd and struck the new ship, making it begin to crash. As it went flying, it swept Kirby and Zelda off the Halberd* (Kirby) "Oh sn..." (Zelda) "STOP SAYING THAT!" * * * (Goomba) "Hello mister tallyman, tally me banana!" (D.K.) "Take this!" (Koopa) "Meep!" (D.K.) "Get back here with my bananas!" (Goomba) "How about THESE bananas?" *3 Bullet bills are fired at D.K.* (Diddy Kong) "Heads up seven up!" *Diddy flies into the air and shoots 2 peanuts at two of the bullet bills. Then the last one flies into the air, and dives down. Diddy fires two more peanuts and they hit the bullet bill knocking it to the ground. After D.K.'s and Diddy's victory poses, the bullet bill explodes, making an even cooler pose* (D.K.) *Pointing with Diddy* "There's our bananas! Lets go!" *When they get to them, they find themselves face to face with Bowser* (D.K.) "Bowser has a gun now? I guess he was tired of losing." (Bowser) "Take this you hellspawns of heaven!" (Diddy) "What?" *But Diddy didn't have much time to think becuase the gun was about to fire. D.K. didn't have much time to think either. So he said the first thing that came to his mind and did the first thing that came to his mind* (D.K.) "Marshmellow!" *D.K. then punched Diddy away to save him from the gun* (Diddy) "D.K.! Noooooooooooo!" *D.K. gets shot by the arrow gun and Bowser gets away with the trophy D.K.*
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![]() Feed it. If you vote for me for C.V., I will be very suprised. Not because I feel like I will lose, but because I'm not even running! XD Brawl FC is 545591345090. Last edited by Dark Kirby; 05-13-2008 at 02:24 AM. |
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Wow, I'm doing well for my first fan fic. Please take this time to vote in the poll or something. Lol. You probably don't care. You just want the story. Fine! Here is the next part!
*Diddy is swinging from tree to tree with his mind creating various thoughts at once* (Diddy) ("What just happened? Why did he do it? Why did Bowser attack? What's going to happen to those bananas? I wonder if we have any shepards pie. I like food. Why did he say marshmellow? Is that a lake?") *Diddy jumps out of the forest and towards a giant lake* *All of the sudden, a ripple appears in the water. Then suddenly Raquanza appears and shoots a beam at Diddy, missing and hitting the ship from earlier next to him.* (Diddy) "I'm safe!" *Raquanza than grabs Diddy in its claws*
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![]() Feed it. If you vote for me for C.V., I will be very suprised. Not because I feel like I will lose, but because I'm not even running! XD Brawl FC is 545591345090. Last edited by Dark Kirby; 05-13-2008 at 03:11 AM. |
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LOLZ
nice xD funny stuff xD i like these verson better then nintnedo's xD
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That's because it's hard to have humor when there's no dialouge. Although that part where DeDeDe flicks Bowser's nose was funny. Also if anyone wants to make fox's lines, do it today before I continue the story.
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you should have link speak in sign language (although that would be hard)maybe fox and falco could speak in their new york/brooklyn accents.
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It's pretty hard to write a language like that because there is no audio for this story. Also, quick thing, does anyone have a problem with me saying the word hell? Because if so, I will delete the word from the story. Just wanted to make sure. New part will be up later.
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*All of the sudden, a blur came out of the burning ship, did a backflip through the air, and knocked Didd out of Raquaza's claws*
(Fox) "Mission accomplished!" (Diddy) "Not quite yet." (Raquaza) "Guy that cause me hurty must die!" *Raquaza shot a beam at Fox, who used his reflector, to reflect it (duh)* (Raquaza) "Hurty again!" *Then Raquaza shot out of the water and onto the land. Then a battle started* (Fox) "Ha! I'm too fast for you!" *Then Fox got hit and went flying into a tree* (Fox) "Oww..." (Diddy) "Oh carp." (Raquaza) "Mmmmm... carp..." *A second battle occurs, this time with Diddy winning. As soon as Raquaza falls back into the water, Fox steps in front of Diddy* (Fox) "Mission accomplished! I beat Raquaza!" (Diddy) "...Hey!"
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![]() Feed it. If you vote for me for C.V., I will be very suprised. Not because I feel like I will lose, but because I'm not even running! XD Brawl FC is 545591345090. Last edited by Dark Kirby; 05-13-2008 at 08:39 PM. |
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its a good addition, but why do you make raquaza sound mentally challenged?
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